Maybe you’re like me when I was a new writer. I
wrote my heart out, not giving any attention to the “rules” of writing. Frankly,
I didn’t know there were rules. It wasn’t until I finished my first novel and submitted it to an editor, and got rejected that I realized
there were a million things I didn’t know about writing a novel. That’s when I
decided to learn the “rules” of writing and discovered I was not alone in the
mistakes I made.
Too
Much Backstory
Everyone falls in love with their characters, and we
want everyone to know everything about them so they can fall in love with them
too. But what new writers don’t realize is that you don’t have to tell a
character’s entire backstory to hold a reader's interest. In fact, the less you
tell up front, the more intrigued your reader may be about your character.
So what if you have a bunch of backstory? That’s okay for now. Sometimes writers have
to get to know their characters before than can tell their story. So
let the words flow. Just remember you will have to go back and do some editing.
Then once you know your character’s story, ask yourself “What is the most important thing about my
character the reader needs to know NOW to understand my character’s action.” Include
that piece of information and then later look for ways to weave in your
character’s history instead of explaining it all at once in narrative. How do you do that?
You can show your character’s history through her
present actions. Did something happen in her past to make her angry or cynical?
Did something happen to cause her to have a bad relationship with a friend or
family member? Resist the Urge to explain (RUE) why a character is acting the
way she’s acting and just show it. Then as the story progresses you can drop
little nuggets of information, one liners, or subtle comments through dialogue
or internal thought to give the reader a HINT at her backstory. If you drop all
the information about your character up front, the mystery and intrigue will be
gone, and your reader will be bored and not want to turn the page.
Improper
Use of POV or Head Hopping
Many new writers like to get inside the head of
every character, but this can be confusing to the reader. The basic rule is to
tell the story through the eyes of one character during a certain scene or
chapter. The character whose eyes you see through is called the POV character
and when you write action or description, you only write what that character
sees and feels. Think of it like looking through a camera lens. Whatever your
character sees through the lens is what you have them see in your story. That
means they can’t see when someone
sneaks up behind them, but they may be able to hear footsteps or smell a
distinct odor as the person approaches. This also applies to emotions. You
can’t know what every character thinks or feels. Just the thoughts and feelings
of your POV character. Yes, some writers break the rules, and it works. But
usually not for new writers.
Telling
Emotions Instead of Showing
Though many new writers may have a good grasp of showing
the actions in a scene instead of telling, most still have difficulty showing
emotions. Instead of naming the emotions, writers can show the emotion in an
action beat by researching how that emotion is displayed physically and
viscerally. So a better way to convey to your reader that a character is angry
is to show him being angry instead of telling the reader the character is
angry. No one likes to be told how to feel. The same is true with the reader.
If you allow the reader to feel your character’s emotions instead of telling
them, it will make for a richer reading experience.
Not
Enough Conflict
Once your character starts her journey toward her
goal, there should be conflict, preferably on every page. But remember conflict
comes in many forms. There’s internal conflict which stems from opposing goals,
dreams, fears, insecurities, and past mistakes. There’s relational conflict
where another character causes problems (external or internal) for the main
character. And there is external conflict that comes from outside the
character. Conflict is anything that slows the journey of your character and
makes it more difficult (yet not impossible) for them to reach the end of their
journey. And conflict is what drives a story and makes a reader turn the page.
No
Story Structure
Instead of thinking of story structure as a bunch of
rules you have to follow, think of it as destination stops on the way to where
you want to go. If you were taking a cross country trip, there would be certain
places you’d stop. This is the basis of story structure. But how you get to
those different places has endless possibilities. For example, you can start in
New York and drive to Philadelphia. Then you can take a plane to Dallas, take a
bus to Oklahoma city and maybe rent a motorcycle for the rest of your journey. Not so structured, now is it?
Though many writers start out making these writing
mistakes, learning the rules of good writing isn’t hard. Are there times
writers break these rules? Yes, and it can work, especially when you have a
reason for breaking the rules and know why you’re doing it. But to do that, new
writers should learn and the “rules” to great writing.
Gina Conroy, a.k.a. "the other Gina," is a monthly contributor to Novel Rocket. She's the founder of Writer...Interrupted and is still learning how to balance a career with raising a family. She is represented by Chip MacGregor of MacGregor Literary, and her first novella, Buried Deception, in the Cherry Blossom Capers Collection, released from Barbour Publishing in January 2012 with her second novel Digging Up Death recently contracted with Stonehouse Ink.
Good points, all.
ReplyDeleteThanks, and all I've been guilty of!
DeleteGreat article, Gina! These are vital tips for the new writer!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Joni
DeleteAnd great for all writers to remember!
Most of these I understand, but I'm a little curious about showing emotions—I get you can show anger maybe by having someone clench their fist or raising their voice. But do you have any suggestions on showing the change viscerally?
ReplyDeleteYes, in fact I've spent a lot of time researching visceral responses to emotion. For anger, you can focus on tightening of jaw, chest, heat in face and neck. You don't have to use all of the visceral responses. A little goes a long way and you can google visceral responses to anger and other emotions. There should be some websites with great examples! This gives me a great idea for a new post! Thanks!
DeleteTelling emotions instead of showing! Excellent point!
ReplyDeleteHope it helps in your writing, Kenebaker!
DeleteGina,
ReplyDeleteExcellent post. I'm going to send it to my newbie Posse members and put the link up on my website http://www.sunnyfrazier.com under Posse Posts.
As an acquisitions editor, these types of mistakes makes me reject manuscripts.
Glad it was helpful to you, Sunny! And I'm surprised at how many of these mistakes make it into published novels! :/
DeleteRick Johnson
ReplyDeleteThe backstory comments helped clear up some things I was unsure about. That helps in taking a new look at my characters and how I need to progress them.
Glad I could help,Rick! It's not easy to do, but with practice it can become easier.
DeleteThis comes at an appropriate time. I was doing some writing on my lunch time. I was reviewing the past pages I had written in the past few days and I was questioning myself on whether there was enough of the character for the reader to enjoy. This created such a conflict! Thanks for the extremely useful advice!
ReplyDeleteGlad it was timely for you, Juan and good luck with your writing!
DeleteTelling emotions. Yes! I am having problems with this in a current rewrite and critique group members keep nailing me on it. It went through a previous rewrite and I think at the time I must have thought I had too much emotion so I backed off. I need to put it back in.
ReplyDeleteIt's hard knowing how much emotion to show. I tend to over emote in the first draft. But after you read your story a couple dozen times, you'll start to notice the over use of emotion. Good luck with your writing!
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